Thanks for your bravery in opening up your self-revision process. I agree with +Karon Bielenda, it is a lovely piece of work as it stands, and it already has the reMEDIAting aspect of having a companion poem floating there in our consciousness as we read this one.
That next level of visual or stylized refraction through formatting or presentation might involve something about spirals, as I see the curving back, circling around, images as not circular but elliptical, and skewed, so one gets to see the before and after as above and below….like writing out the poem on a paper spiral chain, and photographing it in motion…
Or taking the two poems, face to face like the pages of an open book, and flapping them slowly closed towards each other, and then letting them drop back open…
Again, thanks for sharing.